The Train Wreck
While out for a night stroll I saw a racoon walking down the railroad tracks into a tunnel. He went into a tunnel so I followed him and then he went into a hole so I just kept going along the tracks. Then all of the sudden a train comes and all I see is the headlight coming closer so I start running in the opposite direction but the spot just grew and grew. The next morning I woke up in the hospital in a full body cast. The door opens suddenly and I am a bit startled but its just a nurse bringing my food. She hands me a straw and says "Bon Appetite" then she chuckles and leaves.
I like the idea for your story. However, you have a lot of run on sentences and when you add dialog you have to start a new line.
ReplyDeleteInteresting story but it sounds like you are just listing things that happened. So, you might want to smooth it out.
ReplyDeleteI like how you added the this weeks prompt into the story. It's a little strange, though, as you walk into a dark tunnel in the night when there are trains coming and going... over all good story!
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