Thursday 18 February 2016





"Oh no it's here" I say as the door opened and there it was the creature , it had clothe and shoes on also a hat with that. Giant humongous steps it's taking and is starting to point at something in the distance and it's a snack machine and wants chips of some kind. Now it starts laughing at me because of my dress and all I want to do is rip it's heart out, but after all i'm justin a painting and painting cant move.
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  1. Unknown18 February 2016 at 14:12

    Great story . you need to work on puntuation and putting in capitals.

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  2. Unknown21 February 2016 at 09:51

    Be sure to use the feedback given by your peers to make your writing stronger. Also, make sure you read your story out loud to yourself, to a peer and to an adult. This will help you catch some sentences that need revising to help with the flow of your story. Spend some time editing and revising your work.

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